My story:
Lucy eased off the purple wrapper, savouring the moment. The silver foil was harsh against her fingers as she pulled it back to reveal the dark chocolate within. Snap! She broke off a single square and placed it in her mouth. Bitter flavours melted into sweet. She held it on her tongue, allowing the heavenly liquid to seep backwards and slip down her throat. Her eyes closed.
"Ahem!"
Her eyes flew open. Her heart raced as she saw the shopkeeper pointing to the sign: "Shoplifters will be prosecuted."
"Forty pence, please, and next time pay for it first."
17 COMMENTS:
Wonderful! And I love your story. Sensual, pointed, and humorous all at once.
(Should I have used that word?)
Thanks, Bevie. It's a good job you're not biased!
Which word shouldn't you have used? Pointed? Humorous? (I'm only joking.)
Awesome! Congrats, Fairy!
Thanks, stacy!
How wonderful for you!
Thanks, Wings. I've started breathing again now!
Brilliant! And big congrats! I have to say I was melting away as I read...
Loved the punch line too!
Thanks, Jane. I'm really chuffed.
Yay! (Now send me some of that chocobribe or I'm gonna take the resounding 'yay' back.) ;)
Hah. Just read your entry. Loved it!
Hey, FH! Congrats!! I just popped over and read, and no wonder you came in the top ten. Good stuff, girl!
Oh hurray! I loved your story, it was wonderful. I loved the winning story as well, with the chocolate fear, but the rest didn't touch me so.
Yours was excellent !
wyrdd, thanks for pointing me towards the competition! I'm happy to share the chocolate with you: I'll give you my address and you can pop over and pick it up. We've got a spare room you can stay in...
stacy, thank you!
Robin, thanks! I thought mine was very slight in comparison with the others but I was happy to be chosen.
sylvia, thanks! I thought the winning story was excellent too but the one that touched me most was Death By Chocolate.
You tease! I hope to make it back to the UK some day, but not before that chocolate goes bad.
When you make it here I'll get some in specially. Will Green & Black's 80% do you?
Great stuff!
I've been tempted along those lines myself, albeit with linguine...
Whirl, linguine is good but it doesn't have the same effect.
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