Wednesday, June 03, 2009

Maria: a short story


Robin has got us recording ourselves again. This is a short story I wrote recently. It's very rough round the edges but I like the idea behind it.

Image by Colum LaVelle Photography from A Day In Hand website.

23 COMMENTS:

JaneyV said...

As usual you've read beautifully with your wonderful voice. Such a sad story. Sarah loses so much by giving in to her prejudice.

"It's not how I was brought up."

"Neither was I - but I've moved on..."


These lines particularly show where we have a choice in how we feel about anything and how we don't need to be victims of the thinking of the past.

writtenwyrdd said...

I'm still trying to figure out how to record. It might help to devote a significant chunk of time tonight while I listen to your dulcet tones reading this piece.

Bevie said...

JaneyV's right: you read beautifully. And it is such a sad story, telling us so much without being explicit. Wish I had your talent for writing - and speaking.

I'll give recording a read a go, but I'm busy, and it might be a bit before I can get it done.

Love this story.

Robin S. said...

This is beautiful, FH - both your reading and the story being told.

And the words at the end - about things neve being the same again - ring true.

Scott from Oregon said...

I am suddenly in the mood for scones...

ril said...

I like this. It feels real. I like real life a lot.

Whirlochre said...

This is delightful. It rolled out of my headphones without a hitch so I'm guessing it would do the same if read from a page.

pacatrue said...

Like Janey said, the "I've moved on," was a beautiful line. Yeah, I too like how you handled important moments with a soft touch. I have a tendency to go melodramatic and then have to pull back when I catch it.

fairyhedgehog said...

Thanks, all of you, for your kind words.

Scones eh? Now that's an idea.

pjd said...

Jane and Paca pulled my favorite line out, too.

We all have lines we approach but don't cross every day, and sometimes you cross one of them before you've even realized it. I don't get a real sense of sadness at the end--more a regret, and a resignation.

I do love your voice.

fairyhedgehog said...

Thanks, pjd.

Sophie in the Moonlight said...

Your voice was perfect for this story; both are utterly captivating.

Thank you for writing this vignette. It's quite poignant and I've given it a gay vote. Not that it's a joyful piece, rather that it's a fantastic piece.

freddie said...

FHH, I'm in love with your voice. If I could bottle it, I'd give it away to sad people to make them happy.

Wonderful story, too, if sad. But it's realistic, I think.

freddie said...

I'm making another comment so you don't have the unlucky 13.

Aerin said...

FHH, I'm in love with your voice. If I could bottle it, I'd give it away to sad people to make them happy.

As I was listening, I kept grasping for how to express myself - many thanks to freddie for coming up with it first!!

McKoala said...

Oh, so sad! And so beautifully read. Really, you're soooo good at this.

fairyhedgehog said...

Thanks, Sophie. I'm sure I must be blushing!

Kiersten said...

Sad and lovely.

And your voice is simply perfect, FH. The timing and delivery and everything. I want your voice and Whirl's voice to marry each other and have perfect, British accented voice children. And then I will kidnap them and make them talk for me all day.

Hrm. Perhaps this head cold is affecting me more than I thought. Disregard all of that.

fairyhedgehog said...

Thanks, Kiersten.

This is great. All I have to do is read in my normal voice and all my American listeners think it's lovely because of my accent.

By the way, I already have two perfect, British accented children (now grown up) and that is just right for me. Sorry to disappoint you and Whirl's voice.

Hope your cold clears up soon.

Kevin Musgrove said...

I'm suitably impressed. And a nice reading.

fairyhedgehog said...

Thank you, Kevin!

Robin S. said...

You feeling OK?

fairyhedgehog said...

Hi Robin! Yes, I'm OK thanks. Just the usual ups and downs! Thanks for asking.

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